Friday, March 02, 2007

The Evil Eye

She had worn the necklace for as long as she could remember. She could still remember the day her grandmother had given it to her. It had been her sixth birthday and her grandmother, who had been living with them for three years by then, had pulled her into her room. She sat her on the bed and gave her the gold chain with the beautiful blue crystal pendant. When she looked at the pendant she would swear to this day that the eye winked at her. Her Grandmother stressed that she must wear the pendant always. That it would protect her from anyone who was trying to do her bad. So she had. Not because she believed but because she had loved her grandmother. A woman from another land and another time, who did not fit in to the American culture, who kept her old superstitions. The girl had never been to her mother's homeland, a place her Grandmother described with such love and hate at the same time. A country left to die under a communist regime for 39 years. A place where to this day folk myths, legends and superstitions still existed. So she wore the necklace for 30 years now, never giving it a second thought until someone asked about it and then she would tell them the story of her grandmother and how she made her swear never to take it off. It was a good story, people enjoyed it. So the day that it happened she did not even realize that without her grandmother she would not have lived. He was walking toward her on the sidewalk and at first she did not notice him, but as he got closer she felt the change in the air and shivered. She did not look at his face as he approached a warning remembered from her Grandmother. As he passed by she could feel the heat of the pendant and at that moment she understood that there was evil in her modern world and that she must listen to those old superstitions and protect herself.

12 comments:

Anonymous said...

Honey. We need to get you out. Between this post and the last one, I'm a little worried. I think you need a cupcake.

Kamsin said...

Lovely story. I love the sense of continuity from one generation to the next and across different countries, which this lucky charm brings.

sundaycynce said...

Love the bit of suspense and mystery at the end, but it needs more explanation. It was like you started a short story and stopped at the "narrative hook"--the part that sucks the reader into wanting more. Then you just left us....sucked in, wanting more, and so unsatisfied.

Will it continue??

JHS said...

That gave me shivers. I've had experiences like that . . . minus the pendant.

Inconsequential said...

good suspense, but have to agree sometimes we'd like a little more, but then again...why should we get what we want...

Anonymous said...

You always have neat short stories to contribute! I tend to stick with my own experiences. I like your creative-ness. Keep it up.
However, I agree with sundaycynce, that you need to dig deeper, and take it further; take your readers with you after the hook.

Regina said...

You always stir my imagination with your stories! I've had feelings like that, too!

Alex S said...

Loved it! I actually like how you end these stories in such a unique way- they force the reader to fill in some dots of their own and do some imagining too! Congrats on another great story!

TMTW said...

Sometimes the old ways are the best ways!

Patois42 said...

Chilling. And hard to say if it comes from your imagination or your life. I could believe either.

Laini Taylor said...

Creepy! I like it, and I want to know who that creepy guy was. And I want a necklace like that too!

gautami tripathy said...

My nephew gifted me a evil eye bracelet. He insists that I wear it when I go out alone at night. I like it as it a very beautiful bracelet and I do indulge him on those days I am out alone. Sometimes it is more like a force of habit then anything else.

I enjoyed your post.