Friday, January 12, 2007
In the blink of an Eye
In the blink of an eye the idea was there, as if it had always existed and just needed to be noticed. She gathered up her things and threw them into a backpack. She left through her bedroom window hoping against hope that her parents did not hear her as she shimmed down the trellis by her window. She made not a sound and the house remained dark and quite and like that she was gone. When her parents woke the next morning they would think she was sleeping in. It was Saturday morning and teen-agers liked to do that they would think, each privately wishing she would get up so they would not have to talk to each other. They had loved once but that love had died with Greg there first child. They knew and Susan knew it, but no one said anything and they all went on living their lives together in that house but being utterly and completely alone. That was why Susan knew the idea was sound and why she had left. Her parents finally decide that 2pm was a long enough sleep in and went upstairs to rouse their daughter that fateful Saturday morning. When they realized she was gone they became frantic, calling the police and everyone they knew. But they slowly came to realize that she was gone and no amount of searching, pleading on television news programs, posting signs or milk cartons was going to bring her back. For years they continued the charade pretending to be the concerned loving parents of the missing girl. Until one day they both knew it was over, and it seemed as if at one exact moment they both had the same idea at the same time. They both packed a bag and the Mother left through the front door while the Father slipped out the back. When it became evident that they were gone the bank foreclosed on the house and it was sold to a lovely young couple with two young children, one a boy and one a girl.
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11 comments:
Excellent story. I read three times to see all the nuances and ideas hidden there.
oooo Heterboneybones! Another enticing, intriguing short short! I liked it a lot- a lot of sad truth in there. (p.s. call me this weekend!)
A perfect short story- it hooked me from the very beginning! All it takes is an idea...
Wonderful story telling!
Great Story! It's all in an idea.
cool :)
creepy closure... nice
You should enter this in one of those Writers Digest Short Short contests - you'd win.
Thanks for sharing.
Frances
Powerful. Sad.
YOu should really expand on this!
Wow! That was fabulous.
So good, but SO sad! Gooood morning! You told a lot of story in few words...
:)
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